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无论是身处学校还是步入社会，大家都尝试过写作吧，借助写作也可以提高我们的语言组织能力。大家想知道怎么样才能写一篇比较优质的范文吗？下面我给大家整理了一些优秀范文，希望能够帮助到大家，我们一起来看一看吧。
雅思作文批改篇一
write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.
sample answer:
the given pie charts shows data on the main energy sources in the united states of america for two decades. as is presented in the pie charts, oil was the main energy source for the usa both on 80s and 90s.
according to the given data, oil was the main energy source in the usa which was 42% in 1980. the second largest energy source in this decade was the natural gas which supplied 26% of total energy in the same period. then coal supplied more than 20 percent energy demand in usa while hydroelectric power and nuclear power both supplied 5% of the total energy.
in the next decade, the nuclear power produced one tenth of total energy demand and that was almost double that it was in the previous decade. the hydroelectric power as an energy source remained unchanged as it provided 5% of total energy demand in this decade also. the two other main sources for energy in the usa remained almost unchanged in this decade and those two sources were coal and natural gas. finally the use of oil as an energy sources reduced to 33%, which is almost 10% less than the previous decade, but remained the largest source albeit the reduction in this 90s decade.
in summary, the use of oil and coal had reduced and their places as energy sources were replaced by the use of nuclear power in the usa.
雅思作文批改篇二
some people believe that students who want to go to university after graduation from high school should have about one years time to get a job to obtain work experience or have a travel to enlarge their vision.
do you agree or disagree? what is your opinion?
high school students who intend to study at university should attend tertiary education after graduation. to spend one years time doing a job to acquire work experience or to travel for broadening ones vision is, to my mind, a waste of time and energy.
first, university education is the continuation of high school education for those students who want to pursue their learning at an advanced level. a break of one year from academic study will probably weaken ones memory of what has been learned, especially for those who will study such theoretical subjects as mathematics, physics or chemistry.
besides, many nations have established one examination that all students must pass to qualify for admission to a university. for example, in china there is a college entrance examination. anyone who fails in the examination will be denied of admission into a university.
furthermore, one years work or travel does not help students much in their academic studies at university because it is unpredictable for ones work experience to be integrated into ones studies of specific subjects, to say nothing of traveling experience. even if some subjects, such as mba, require students to have work experience, one years work experience, however, is not sufficient to meet the requirements of three or five years, and ones work experience should, after all, be related to management.
雅思作文批改篇三
in some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
it is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break form studying after graduating from high school. the trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.
the reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge ad experience of the world. by contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or traveling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. they tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.
however, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. they may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university overall, i think this is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career.
my view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. that is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.
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雅思作文批改篇四
task：some people argue that too much attention and too many resources are given to the protection of wild animals and what extent do you agree or disagree?
sample answer：
in recent years, animal protection has become an issue of concern. people take different attitudes towards the increasing attention and expenditure on wildlife conservation. some people suggest that the spending should be redirected to helping other fields in society. i agree with the view that the investment in wildlife protection is not worthwhile.
animals, as a key component of the whole food chain, have a profound impact on the sustainability of an ecosystem. as we known, every kind of animals plays an important role in natural balance. for instance, the demise of any species will lead to the growth or decline of other species. in some extreme cases, some species may at the verge of extinction such as dodo bird. if people did not take actions to protect wildlife as soon as possible, we humans would be affected in the end.
however, there are more issues that we need to focus in our society rather than protecting animals. in current social context, the primary task is still to improve living standards since there are many people living under the poverty line. only when people are in a good living condition, can they pay attention to other social problems. besides, technology and education are another two aspects of governments to concern. these two industries accelerate the development of society, which will provide a better protection for wildlife in turn.
in conclusion, although the animal is a significant part of ecosystem, it is better for governments to invest more finance and resources in other social problems.
雅思作文批改篇五
in recent years, there has been growing interest in therelationship between equality and personal people believe that individuals can achieve more inegalitarian societies. others believe that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals are free to succeed or fail according to their individual is your view of the relationship between equality and personal success?
平等社会个人成就大；放任自由发展的社会个人成就大。你认为呢?
in my opinion, an egalitarian society is one in which everyone has the same rights and the same opportunities. i completely agree that people can achieve more in this kind of society.
education is an important factor with regard to personal success in life. i believe that all children should have access to free schooling, and higher education should be either free or affordable for all those who chose to pursue a university degree. in a society without free schooling or affordable higher education, only children and young adults from wealthier families would have access to the best learning opportunities, and they would therefore be better prepared for the job market. this kind of inequality would ensure the success of some but harm the prospects of others.
i would argue that equal rights and opportunities are not in conflict with peoples freedom to succeed or fail. in other words, equality does not mean that people lose their motivation to succeed, or that they are not allowed to fail. on the contrary, i believe that most people would feel more motivated to work hard and reach their potential if they thought that they lived in a fair society. those who did not make the same effort would know that they had wasted their opportunity. inequality, on the other hand, would be more likely to demotivate people because they would know that the odds of success were stacked in favour of those from privileged backgrounds.
in conclusion, it seems to me that there is a positive relationship between equality and personal success.
雅思作文批改篇六
其次回答时可以尽量分层次的梳理，比如问到中国人喜欢的植物时，可以按照不同人群的特点来总结概括。
下面就是针对favorite photo的话题举例的两个part3 的答案参考
1. what’s the advantages and disadvantages of taking photos with smartphones?
思路分析 ： 优点更容易总结， 例如方便携带，更容易传输;缺点是失去了拍照的瞬间性，很多摆拍的照片没有更多的纪念意义
well, the first benefit of taking photos with smartphones would be easy transmission. it’s very handy to share a picture with friends as long as there is internet available. it could be even easier if two mobiles are both iphones, thanks to the airdrop.
also, compare to the digital cameras which are usually quite bulky, smartphones on the other hand are very portable. and all the functions work automatically which means even if you don’t know anything about photography, there is still good chances to craft nice phones.
talking about the disadvantages, the only thing i can think of would be that people may not treasure pictures as memories that much as before.
a snap shot serves to crystallize the important moment in your life and that moment lasts for the length of a breath. people are unprepared to be filmed and their emotions are open to interpretation afterwards.
but using smartphones, people tend to take several at the same time with the same pose, and to filter out the best one. i think it lose the real meaning of recording the true life to some extent.
2. what is the benefit of learning painting for children?
思路分析 ： 发展孩子的想象力从而培养他们的创造力是学习绘画带来的最直接的好处，同时也可以让孩子还学去欣赏生活中的美好，进而更加尊重生命。
first of all, painting is the easiest way for children to express their imagination. so learning to do that would definitely strengthen their ability to think outside of the box which is significant for their later lives.
because imagination is the basis for creation and innovation, one can’t achieve more in any aspects without it. apart from that, learning painting could be the best way to teach kids to appreciate beauty and therefore to treasure life.
雅思口语part3 被认为是debate的形式，如果答案准备的不够全面充分就很可能会遇到被考官“质疑”追着问的情况，所以如果在最开始的回答时就可以尽量完整，那就不会给考官留下“穷追猛打”的机会啦
雅思作文批改篇七
一、“占比”数据的描写饼状图的基本特征是，在一个整体里，也就是一个饼里，表示了若干个元素的比例关系，比例的总和是100%。
想准确、地道地描述饼状图，我们首先需要掌握一些表示“占比”动词的表达，小轩总结了六种描写饼状图中最实用、最经典的句型：
比如分别用这六种句型来描述下面的图：
句型一：the majority of sales in bobs store come from dvds, with exactly 60%.
句型二：dvds account for three fifths of the total sales.
句型三：the percentage of pc games sold is exactly 20%.
句型四：fifteen percent of items sold in the store are cds.
句型五：there is merely 5% of the total revenue generated by selling posters.
句型六：for the sales of posters, only 5% contributes to the turnover（营业额）.
二、饼状图的分类和写法方法雅思考试里的饼状图可以分为三大类，在拿到题目时就要决定是属于哪一类，因为不同的分类，写作的思路会完全不一样。
>> 第一类：单一个饼图。
在雅思考试里，其实极少会在小作文只出现一个饼图让你描述的，通常是单一饼图+其他类型的图（如柱状图、表格等）。
遇到单一个饼图的话，应该把它独立成一个主体段，段里按照不同元素的占比，从大到小按顺序写。
写作时注意需要加上连接词，使句子之间的衔接更紧密、读起来更流畅。
比如上面的例题“bob的音乐店”，加上连接词后的版本是这样的：
不知各位烤鸭有没有注意到：在描述每一个比例的时候，表示“销售额”的名词都在不断的变换，“sales”, “items sold”, “total revenue”, “turnover”，这正是雅思写作评分标准中lexical resource（词汇多样化）的要求。
除了学习上面的句型外，各位在描述对象时还要注意用同义词、近义词，甚至是反义词变换。
>> 第二类：有表示时间推移的，题目通常含有不只有一个饼图，通常是一个图表示一个时间节点。
对于这种类型的饼状图，其实也是线形图的变种，我们把它转化为线形图，按照时间的先后顺序来写，因为存在时间推移是线形图的首要特征。（线形图的写作步骤请移步到part 1：线形图）来看一个出自《剑桥雅思8》的例题：
从以上三幅图可以看出，讲的是一个英国学校在三个年份的不同开销，分别是1981年、1991年、2001年。
对于这样有时间推移的多个饼图，我们的写法是：首先把图中占比例最大到最小的元素排序，然后内部再按照时间的先后顺序写。
看下剑桥官方给出的满分范文是怎么按照这思路写的：（开头和结尾段已省去）
看完范文，是不是发现还是使用线形图里很熟悉的“升高”、“下降”的各种表达？
>> 第三类：没有时间推移，题目中含有多于一个饼图的。
这类图都有一个共同的特点：每个饼里的元素都大都是相同的。
比如下面的例题：
题目里两幅图对比了在2000年英国和香港两个地区的家庭开销，可以注意到图里的元素都是一样的，这种图在雅思考试才是真正的饼状图。没有时间推移，不能转化，怎么办？可以有序、系统、巧妙地对比着写！这类题的写法是：...
（文章已超载）'雅思作文批改篇八
successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
as a result of constant media attention, sports professionals in my country have become stars and celebrities, and those at the top are paid huge salaries. just like movie stars, they live extravagant lifestyles with huge houses and cars.
many people find their rewards unfair, especially when comparing these super salaries with those of top surgeons or research scientists, or even leading politicians who have the responsibility of governing the country. however, sports salaries are not determined by considering the contribution to society a person makes,or the level of responsibility he or she holds. instead, they reflect the public popularity of sport in general and the level of public support that successful stars can generate. so the notion of ‘fairness’ is not the issue.
those who feel that sports stars’ salaries are justified might argue that the number of professionals with real talent is very few, and the money is a recognition of the skills and dedication a person needs to be successful. competition is constant and a player is tested every time they perform in their relatively short pressure from the media is intense and there is little privacy out of the spotlight. so all of these factors may justify the huge earnings.
personally, i think that the amount of money such sports stars make is more justified than the huge earnings of movie stars, but at the same time, it indicates that our society places more value on sport than on more essential professions and achievements.
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雅思作文批改篇九
happiness is considered very important in life. why is it difficult to define?what factors are important in achieving happiness?
happiness is very difficult to define, because it means so many different things to different people. while some people link happiness to wealth and material success,others think it lies in emotions and loving personal relationships. yet others think that spiritual paths, rather than either the material world or relationships with people, are the only way to true happiness.
because people interpret happiness for themselves in so many different ways, it is difficult to give any definition that is true for everyone. however, if there are different kinds of happiness for different individuals then the first step in achieving it would be to have a degree of self-knowledge. a person needs to know who he or she is before being able to know what it is that makes him or her happy.
of course, factors such as loving relationship, good health, the skills to earn a living and a peaceful environment all contribute to our happiness too. but this does not mean that people without these conditions cannot be happy.
overall, i think an ability to keep clear perspectives in life is a more essential factor in achieving happiness. by that i mean an ability to have a clear sense of what is important in our lives (the welfare of our families, the quality of our relationships, making other people happy, etc.) and what is not (a problem at work,getting annoyed about trivial things, etc.).
like self-awareness, this is also very difficult to achieve, but i think these are the two factors that may be the most important for achieving happiness.
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雅思作文批改篇十
大作文考官范文8个话题分类如下：
《simon的写作素材（大小作文范文）》这里有word版本和pdf，word大家可以在电脑上进行批注、标记，是不是超级方便呀~~~
高清pdf版本大家可以打印下来。
其中另附有考官批改案例，可以看到考官评分标准以及思维，还有可以避免一些易错点。我觉得这个是非常利于大家掌握考官批改心理的，从中找出关键点避免小错误。
《simon小作文范文合集预览》小作文合集中对不同的题型进行了分类。柱状图、线图、流程图、饼图等比较常见的小作文题型每一种题型下的案例都很经典，而且在往年的考试中重复率较高。小作文虽然简单，但是碰到地图题、流程图，大家就犯难了。
simon小作文共44页69篇基本上把所有可能遇到的题型和变化都囊括了，大家可以参考一下，之后再遇到比较难得题型时，至少不会毫无准备了。
雅思小作文写作建议，这本书也太和我心意了，同学们，真的写作逻辑、思路对于写出一篇完整且通顺连贯的大小作文非常重要。最重要的是，文章下面还带有注释和9分范文，太可了，配合我之前分享过的顾家北手把手教你写作pdf资料，写作7分不愁没救。
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雅思作文批改篇十一
explain some of the ways in which humans are damagingthe environment. what can governments do to addressthese problems? what can individual people do?
解释一些环境污染的途径，政府和人们能够做什么?
humans are responsible for a variety of environmental problems, but we can also take steps to reduce the damage that we are causing to the planet. this essay will discuss environmental problems and the measures that governments and individuals can take to address these problems.
two of the biggest threats to the environment are air pollution and waste. gas emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles lead to global warming, which may have a devastating effect on the planet in the future. as the human population increases, we are also producing ever greater quantities of waste, which contaminates the earth and pollutes rivers and oceans.
governments could certainly make more effort to reduce air pollution. they could introduce laws to limit emissions from factories or to force companies to use renewable energy from solar, wind or water power. they could also impose green taxes on drivers and airline companies. in this way, people would be encouraged to use public transport and to take fewer flights abroad, therefore reducing emissions.
individuals should also take responsibility for the impact they have on the environment. they can take public transport rather than driving, choose products with less packaging, and recycle as much as possible. most supermarkets now provide reusable bags for shoppers as well as banks for recycling glass, plastic and paper in their car parks. by reusing and recycling, we can help to reduce waste.
in conclusion, both national governments and individuals must play their part in looking after the environment.
